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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new realway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are two opposite points of view so that one of them
depict
Suggestion
depicts
 that building new
railway
 lines is significantly better rather than empowering public
transport
 which is common
to
Suggestion
in
 society.
This
 essay will examine two opinions about the future of public
transport
.
Interestingly that
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Interestingly, that
 new
railway
 lines which will give an opportunity to fast trains to get necessary point between cities will have a positive impact on government’s well-being.
In addition
, citizens can be able to
use fast
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use, fast
 trains to overcome with time-consuming issues. It’s well-known that in
this
globalization
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globalized
globalizing
 world, the skill to manage time properly is a key to success.
On the other hand
, it will negatively affect the country’s economy, due to the fact that constructing a new
railway
 requires funding lots of
money
.
However
, there
is
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are
 a number of people who suggest
instead
 of spending
money
 on building a new
railway
, it is smarter developing and renewing already existing public
transport
.
In addition
, it will cost-efficiently.
For example
, half of the given
money
 can be spent on education, like a scholarship or an educational fee. Since
money which
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money, which
 was invested in education is comparatively similar to future investment. Surprisingly, some governments have already built several railways, and just reconstructing of public
transport
 will be a better alternative way. In conclusion, in my opinion, the advantages of the renewing of an existing
railway
 outweigh points of view in support of having new railways.
In addition
, the government can have a survey in order to know more about how many citizens want to have new railways.

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