In many countries, women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

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Marriage is a beautiful relationship between two bodies and families. At the current time of technological advancement, one of the most pressing concerns regarding the given topic

that is

it necessary for women to get married; either being able to earn their money by yourself? I completely agree with

this

topic and shall explore the dimensions and assertions of

this

essay and shape up my opinion by the end.

To begin

with, there are numerous reasons why women not ready to get married. The

first

and foremost reason is education.During past time, girls were not allowed to study because of domestic violence.

Moreover

, the value of males was more than female due to that one of the earning hand in the home was male,

therefore

, only man had right to go to school and study.

In addition

this

, the girls' parents prefer to marry without being studied.

However

, now, the world has totally been changed and the mentality of people

also change

Suggestion

also changes

has also changed

For instance

, women are studying and taking more initiative to compete task with men. There is a huge change between past and present world, women are better than boys in every field; either it is educational or professional.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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