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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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People hold different views when it comes to the choice of accommodation. As some people choose to stay in an independent
house whereas
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house, whereas
 some others believe preferring flats as the type of accommodation have more benefits. Both types have their own merits and demerits. There are numerous benefits of living in an independent
house
 as one has the complete
house
 on his own and no interference of others.
Such
 houses can be designed and planned according to the individual choice and requirement. Say
for
example some
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example, some
 people desire to have a big living area and small bedrooms whereas some others might require more number of bedrooms and a smaller living area. So choosing an individual
house
 gives to the liberty to go by your requirement.
Additionally one
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Additionally, one
 can have complete privacy as there is no sharing of balconies or rooftops with others in case of houses.
However
, living in a
house
 has some cons
also
. Usually the maintenance and security require high cost involvement.
For instance
, to keep the lawn maintained one need to
heir
a newly hired employee
hire
 a gardener, for security
purpose either
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purpose, either
 CCTV cameras are required or to need a watchman, and
furthermore
.
On the other hand
, the biggest benefit of living in an apartment is that all these maintenance and other related charges are shared amongst the other members of the building. But again at the cost of compromised privacy and
also
 less options are available in terms of flat design and architecture. In the conclusion,
although
 flats over several
benefits but
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benefits, but
 these are depressed by the inconveniences offered. So definitely the benefits of staying in a
house
 outweigh that of the flats.

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