“Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsable for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsable for bringing the children up”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that fatherhood is not so significant as a motherhood.

This

belief exists because women have the physical power to decide if or not to have babies,

hence

they are

responsable

worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable

responsible

to take care them.

However

, I disagree with

this

, due to are considered several factors to bring a baby to the world

such

as the support economic and emotional, which depending from two persons.

Otherwise

, the idea about fatherhood is not so emphasised, likely arise

for

Suggestion

the cause that in the advertisement, overall the ads

shows

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show

mothers take care a baby and it almost does not appear fathers.

Other

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Another

reason of

this

is the law about paternity, because the postnatal is focused more

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the woman than men. Actually, in Chile, the permission of male postnatal started approximately 4 years ago.

On the other hand

, it seems to me that nowadays the society has changed, so the attention for children is concerned in great measure to men as well. In fact, when a woman is pregnant is a decision that

belong

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belongs

to a couple. If she does not feel

support

Suggestion

the support

Suggestion

her boyfriend, probably will decide not bring that baby. But if he

agree

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agrees

with

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have a

children

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child

, likely he will be

allowing

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allowed

to spend a lot of time with the kid. In conclusion, some persons feel that fatherhood is not so extend as a motherhood, and they believe

this

for the reason that the paternity is more

associed

make a logical or causal connection

associated

to the feminity.

Nevertheless I

Accept comma addition

Nevertheless, I

disagree with

this

, because the society

have

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had

has

advance

Suggestion

advanced

a lot in the

last

year,

therefore

the

paternhood

having patterns (especially colorful patterns)

patterned

equallity

the quality of being the same in quantity or measure or value or status

equality

for both genders.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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