The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

The main priority of
government
’s investment
must be focus
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must be focused
on public services
instead
of arts, music, and theatre. I am sure that it is not true and arts are a part of society that the
government
has to pay attention to these. It goes without saying that
culture
is one of the most important sections of a country. Arts, music, and theatre are making our
culture
stronger than before. There were a lot of good attitude in my motherland that were destroyed during
last decades
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the last decades
, so the
government
can save these by investing
money
in
arts
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the arts
.
For instance
, they can put very good advertisement during a show and illustrate people how to use a traditional manner.
This
fact is proven that
arts
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the arts
have an essential role in society and it can help the
government
to keep people happy with a normal behaviour.
In addition
, funding in
arts
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the arts
makes job and
money
for people too. As you know, there are wide ranges of jobs related to arts and billions of dollars are transferred during a year, so these are helpful for
economy
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the economy
too. The
government
makes people happier by investing
on
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in
entertainment, and it makes
money
from
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for
this
funding at the same time. I have an uncle who works for a big instrument company, and he improves his profession because he is supported by
culture
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a culture
the culture
and art ministry. He said, “They believed that work on arts, music, and theatre makes jobs for people and makes
money
for them.” In
conclude
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concluding
, I am certain that finding
money
in
arts
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the arts
is not a wrong way. It helps people to know their
culture
better;
moreover
, it makes a lot of jobs for amateurs and professionals.

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