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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables
shows
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 the percentage of the household revenue expenditure for
disbuse
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disburse
 food,drink,housing,clothing and entertainment in five countries.
Overall
, the percentage of the spend food,drink and housing
were
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was
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 on
avarage
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average
 the same
Whereas
, clothing and entertainment are really low compared to others.
According to
table
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the table
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,
Turkey
 and Spain spend more money on their food and drink at %36 and %31 respectively. They are more than UK and
france
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France
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.
in addition
 housing percentage of france %31 fermany % 33 and UK %37 respectively. But
Turkey
 and Spain least than three countries. The tables illustrate that the proportion of
the
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apply
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entertainment and clothing are noticeably low in five
country
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countries
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Turkey
 and Britain
were
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was
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lovest
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the lovest
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 pay money %11 and %10
comparison
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comparisons
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 with the expenditure other three countries which
%
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are %
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13 and %19. Europe spends very little money
for
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on
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 clothing.
Specially
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 France and Spain
almost
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are almost
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same
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the same
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 but Germany at %15,
UK
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the UK
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 at %11 and
Turkey
 at %12 are coming back to back.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • speculate
  • real estate
  • average income
  • trends
  • significant differences
  • lifestyle
  • surprising findings
  • notable patterns
  • economic priorities
  • living standards
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