In films and computer games violence has become more popular. Some people think this has negative effects on society, other think it is harmless relaxation. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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entertainment industry

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The entertainment industry

Entertainment industry

lately gains

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has lately gained

more space in our community life. Movies and video games with

violence

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violent

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

aquire

come into the possession of something concrete or abstract

acquire

more popularity

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more popular

day after another which is welcomed by a considerable sector of

society but

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society, but

I support the other point of view which says it has a bad effect on

society

. Computer games and movies

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are

an essential part of modern home these days which have very limited control

from

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parents and

wisemen

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wise men

of the

society

Violance

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Violent

Violence

content offered to under age on media will give them the

easyiest

posing no difficulty; requiring little effort

easiest

way to solve their problems they face. For

instatance

an occurrence of something

instance

the

tuff

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Tuff

reactions records

has been increased

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have been increased

dramatically during the

last

decade.

This

made the tenderness values go down in the

periority

status established in order of importance or urgency

priority

list of

society

principles which spreads the values of isolation as a response to avoid the consequences of

violance

an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)

violence

that may

happend

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happen

happened

, which I don't think

this

has helped

society

to develop their role model.

On the other hand

violance

an act of aggression (as one against a person who resists)

violence

genres movies and video games

has affected

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have affected

the values and principles of the role model which should be presented to the

society

. How the creative solutions may be developed to solve conflict

instead

of the easy solution

offer

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offered

by the power of arms.

For

example colaborative

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example, collaborative

example collaborative

agreements made to solve community internal fights will save the

society

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society's

integrity and encourage all the community sectors to share their ideas to solve their problems. To conclude, violance content is spreading over time which I believe

this

will not be the best content to be delivered to develop a healthy

society

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desensitize
aggressive behavior
glorify
artistic expression
pent-up emotions
media consumption
model for conflict resolution
fiction vs. reality
outlet for frustration
conclusive evidence
social influences
real-world aggression
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In films and computer games violence has become more popular. Some people think this has negative effects on society, other think it is harmless relaxation. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers ahould be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe thay should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and town, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.