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The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
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The bar chart gives information
in
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 different education levels in the UK in 2010.
Women predominated
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Women-predominated
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 schools for children.
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it
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was particularly true, having over 95 per cent in
nursery
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the nursery
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 and over 90 per cent in primary school as female teachers Men and women were equally represented in teaching institutions regarding older children: secondary
school
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schools
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 and colleges. Colleges were 50 per cent male and female.
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, men held a larger number in higher level education institutions, particularly true for
male
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males
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 with twice as many males
were
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teaching staff than female

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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