The diagram above shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram above shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given
pmicture
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picture
depicts the working of the
water
pump
powerd
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powered
by the energy obtained from the sun.
Overall
, it can be seen that the process of
water
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the water
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pump is
a
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very
comlicated
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complicated
,involving many stages,starting from solar
panel
to
water
supply to
village
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as a final stage.
Firstly
,solar
panel
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collect solar energy from the sun.Photovoltaic cells connect with the solar
panel
,which
is converts
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solar energy to DC power.The DC power generated from the
panel
is linked to the bore located inside the underground bore or well. After that,
water
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level in the well is higher
ratherthan
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rather than
the bore pump.The bore pump allows
water
to pump out and stored
it
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into
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the
water
tank.
Finally
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this
water
tank distributes the
water
to
village
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the village
a village
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, panel with synonyms.
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