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The diagram above shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram above shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given picture depicts the working of the
water
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 pump powered by the energy obtained from the sun.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the process of
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water
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the water
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 pump is
a
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very complicated, involving many stages, starting from solar
panel
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 to
water
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 supply to the village as a final stage.
Firstly
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,
solar
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the solar
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panel
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 collects solar energy from the sun.Photovoltaic cells connect with the solar
panel
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, which
converting
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 solar energy to DC power.The DC power generated from the
panel
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 is linked to the bore located inside the underground bore or well. After that,
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water
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the water
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 level in the well is higher rather than
the
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in the
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 bore pump.The bore pump allows
water
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 to pump out and stored
it
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into
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in
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 the
water
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 tank.
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Finally
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this
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water
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 tank distributes the
water
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 to the village.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, panel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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