It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Nowadays, the question of whether punishment would help children distinct true and false or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. While using punishments is necessary in order to children learn from their mistakes. I believe that they are more likely to have harmful impacts. On the one hand, there are two compelling reasons why punishment should be imposed on children.

Firstly

, children

are

Suggestion

curious and sometimes less mature to understand deeply harmful effects of bad behaviour.

Therefore

, by implementing discipline, which makes kids realize their mistakes throughout new experiences, enrich knowledge and especially valuable lessons to ignore errors in the future.

Secondly

, not all children are docile, many are very stubborn and do not accept their shortcomings.

This

means that they tend to argue and shout, even unethical behaviour with their parents who bringing up them. So,

that is

a great tool if parents use fit sanction with them.

On the other hand

, I would argue that sometimes, the drawbacks are outweighed by the benefits.

First

, harsh punishments are likely to affect negatively and deep depressions in the long term.

For example

, many children over the world

were

we are

we're

dealing with death when they are punished in hard conditions like lack of food, water by their parents.

Moreover

, severe punishments merely frighten children and more difficult to educate them. Children respond more to affection than to abuse.

Therefore

, in state of applying punishments, parents could collaborate with teachers to come up with feasible solutions as a warning or self-criticism, which is a positive effect on children's cognitive development. In conclusion,

although

imposing some punishments can help children learn from their mistakes, the downsides of

this

method need to consider.

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punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to University education and that government should make it free-for-all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?