The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below
The pie charts compare the
expenditure
of US residents in two different years in seven categories namely
food
,
cars
, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books.
Food
and
cars
made up the two biggest items of
expenditure
in both years. Together they comprised over half of
household
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spending.
Food
accounted for 44% of spending in 1966, but
this
dropped by two-thirds to 14% in 1996.
However
, the outlay on
cars
doubled, rising from 23% in 1966 to 45% in 1996. Other areas changed significantly. Spending on eating out doubled, climbing from 7% to 14%. The proportion of salary spent on computers increased dramatically, up from 1% in 1996 to 10% in 1996.
However
, as computer
expenditure
rose, the percentage of outlay on books plunged from 6% to 1%. Some areas remained relatively unchanged. Americans spent approximately the same amount of salary on petrol and furniture in both years. In conclusion, increased amounts spent on
cars
,
computer
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computers
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, and eating out were made up for by drops in
expenditure
on
food
and books.

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