The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below
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The pie charts compare the
expenditure
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of US residents in two different years in seven categories namely
food
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,
cars
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, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books.
Food
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and
cars
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made up the two biggest items of
expenditure
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in both years. Together they comprised over half of
household
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the household
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spending.
Food
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accounted for 44% of spending in 1966, but
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dropped by two-thirds to 14% in 1996.
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, the outlay on
cars
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doubled, rising from 23% in 1966 to 45% in 1996. Other areas changed significantly. Spending on eating out doubled, climbing from 7% to 14%. The proportion of salary spent on computers increased dramatically, up from 1% in 1996 to 10% in 1996.
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, as computer
expenditure
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rose, the percentage of outlay on books plunged from 6% to 1%. Some areas remained relatively unchanged. Americans spent approximately the same amount of salary on petrol and furniture in both years. In conclusion, increased amounts spent on
cars
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,
computer
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computers
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, and eating out were made up for by drops in
expenditure
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on
food
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and books.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, food, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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