The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between

1983 and 1992.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the number of patients diagnosed with
diarrhea
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in Mashhad remained relatively unchanged over the first half of the graph followed by several abrupt changes in the
last
part of the graph.
Moreover
, the incidence rate dipped considerably before it reached a peak in 1989, but it is estimated that
this
digestive tract infection was completely eliminated at
last
. In the first two years, there
were
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no
change
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with approximately 100 confirmed cases of
diarrhea
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, after which it climbed noticeably and almost doubled in
next
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two years (1985-1987).
Then
it
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suddenly declined to back
the
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same level as they were between 1983 and 1985.
However
, these moderate changes did an abrupt
about face
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(M?) and disease outbreak peaked at just above 400 in 1989, which is followed by a slight reduction in
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year with just about 350 and plateaued at
this
relatively higher level compared to the previous lower rates until 1991.
Finally
, it was tremendously plunged
into
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zero level.
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