The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
, the number of patients diagnosed with diarrhea
in Mashhad remained relatively unchanged over the first half of the graph followed by several abrupt changes in the Change the spelling
diarrhoea
last
part of the graph. Moreover
, the incidence rate dipped considerably before it reached a peak in 1989, but it is estimated that this
digestive tract infection was completely eliminated at last
.
In the first two years, there were
no Change the verb form
was
change
with approximately 100 confirmed cases of Fix the agreement mistake
changes
diarrhea
, after which it climbed noticeably and almost doubled in Change the spelling
diarrhoea
next
two years (1985-1987). Correct article usage
the next
Then
it
suddenly declined to back Correct pronoun usage
they
the
same level as they were between 1983 and 1985.
Change preposition
to the
However
, these moderate changes did an abrupt about face
(M?) and disease outbreak peaked at just above 400 in 1989, which is followed by a slight reduction in Add a hyphen
about-face
next
year with just about 350 and plateaued at Correct article usage
the next
this
relatively higher level compared to the previous lower rates until 1991. Finally
, it was tremendously plunged into
zero level.Change preposition
to
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