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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
I don't know people who live
next
 to me, well. I just can recognise their faces, and I salute them when I come across with them. I see them rarely. I rarely come across with them when I enter into or quit the apartment. The
first
 problem that comes to my mind is the noise problem. Some neighbours are very sensitive about
this
, and they can make a complain when you want to listen music loudly or you sing aloud while taking shower Neighbours can help each other in many ways if they get along. They can give each other the wifi password, you can borrow some ingredients that you need while cooking from them, they can help you go to the hospital when you are sick and not able to go to the hospital on your own. I want to talk about a course that I took when I was in
first year
Suggestion
the first year
 of my master study. The course was about human rights, and lecturer decided to make a questionnaire about abortion. Some argue that abortion should be illegal because it is against the right to live. Some argue that it should keep on being legal because it is a
decision
 about a the female's body. I said that abortion should be legal till a certain point of pregnancy, and I added that
final
Suggestion
the final decision
a final decision
decision
 should be made by the female, but the female should get father's
decision
 before making final
decision
. Companies mostly want to learn about the customers' opinions because they want to sale more and earn more, and to do
this
, they need to learn what they are lacking of and how they can improve their products by asking customers' opinions. It depends on what kind of group of people they did a survey with. If
this
 group of people is honest, and they express their real opinions, making a survey with those can work. If it is the opposite, a survey will be useless. There may be various reasons why people don't want to give their real opinions. They can feel ashamed of their true opinions, they may not want to share personal information about themselves.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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