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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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 Ali My name is Majdi Herzallah and I'
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 a student here at Jordan university, where, I live in dorm number 6 at block C, I'
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 sending you
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 letter to express my frustration with my living situation. For the past 3 years, I was living in a single room, but for unknown reasons the dorm administration decided to make all the dorm
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 contained two students at least, but unfortunately, the person
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 living with is noisy, unclean and has really bad manners. Despite my many attempts to fix my roommate's habits, he kept doing the same things, which is leading me to lose focus on my study which eventually will affect my school grade. In conclusion, I have no problem living with another student, but at least the person whom I'
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, you can return back my previous arrangement.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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