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Some People Think That Because Some Children Find Some Subjects Such As Mathematics And Philosophy Difficult They Ought To Be Optional Instead Of Compulsory. To What Extent Do You Agree?

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According to a section of society, few subjects like mathematics and philosophy should be optional for some juvenile, which find them hard;
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, Others believe that those subjects are useful in future. In my opinion, those subjects should be non-compulsory for which find it difficult. To embark on, quite of subjects are tough for some kids because not every
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 born with same cognitive skill. It is unfair to evaluating children with other in the same scale. Each youngster has their own skill. As
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 exemplification, The children blessed with exceptional skill in arts
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can not compare
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 to those join in the science fair.
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, educational system cannot force them by selecting their subjects which are burden for youth. If someone pressurised them to learn that that course which they feel grievous that will be impacting negatively in child psychology.
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, It is important that children have need strong fundamental knowledge about philosophy and mathematics.
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 of all philosophy may be boring subject, but it can teach juvenile about the basic core value of social and personal life
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 as, ethics, moralities etc.
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, Mathematics train student to solve various problem in different field logically.
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, The knowledge of math makes student smarter as it teaches them to think in the right way. It is open doors to may interesting subjects and careers. Numerous course requires strong knowledge in mathematics as an example, attending an engineering programme, students need a solid sense in mathematics. To recapitulate, choose subject depend on student preference might be useful for working their strength. I do not think the impact of compulsory course can prevail student’s freedom of choice subject.

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