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A lot of people spend a major part of their adult life at work, so job satisfaction is very important for individual happiness. What are the main factors that contribute to job satisfaction? What are the possible solutions for people who are unsatisfied with their jobs?

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These days people spend most of their time at
work
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. Half of their life they are
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in
 jobs. Individual happiness at
work
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 is as much important as you are at home with family.
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 essay will try to find which factors contribute to job satisfaction and which solutions can help people who are unsatisfied with their jobs. Young and ambitious people who finished their universities should be the most satisfied people. They are young and they want to show what they know. Their ideas are modern. Companies have to recognize that and try to keep that people enthusiastic by giving them an opportunity to be promoted.
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, older people are tired and unsatisfied enough for the rest of their
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 journey. Corporations need to find solutions for them and to encourage them be much more contented at
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. One of the solution that I could suggest is to make small teams whit both young and old people. Young people will make freshness and old people could teach them so many things.
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 way of working will help both sides. Employers
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 have to know that old people need more free time for their families so they have to give them more days off. On than
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the way
 they will be satisfied and they will
work
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 better and finish everything on time. In conclusion, if companies want to have more profit they need to care about their employees, about their happiness and well-being. They should find out what to do to encourage them to
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 more in
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the interest
 of companies.

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