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A company has announced that it is wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your country. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

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It is an undeniable fact that industrial development is a reality and a must in our modern age and it is very common to see many factories mushroom up in different places both in urban and rural areas. In
this
 context; if a company declares that it wants to build a large industrial facility near my civilization, I think
this
 situation will bring both positive and negative impacts on my society for some reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will try to indicate the impacts of positive and negative sides of having a large
industry
 near a
community
. Obviously, a large
industry
 may contribute to my association in a positive way.
First
 of all, a new
industry
 means new job opportunities for the people in my
community
. That’s to say, a cooperative is a place of production and naturally it needs labour and is an employment source for people of my
community
.
In addition
 to
this
; with a new
factory
 in the neighbourhood, it is expected in the society to be popular and to have a lively and busy social life.
In other words
, more people will stay and live in the association because of the
industry
, so different places of socializing and some basic needs will be opened
such
 as markets, cafes, restaurants, schools, laundries etc.
Thus
, once a quiet and emptier place, my
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 will be full of people and many newly opened social places.
On the other hand
, a large
factory
 may be disadvantageous to my society.
Firstly
, a new cooperative will bring a lot of people to work and these people will change population in terms of crowd and
noise
. What I mean is that an overcrowded association is not nice, easy and appropriate to live in.
Moreover
, the crowd will automatically cause
noise
 which is not desired by the residents of my
community
.
For example
, the crowd and
noise
 will lead to traffic jams,
noise
 pollution and stress.
Additionally
, building a
factory
 usually causes destroying green spaces and air pollution. That’s to say, a cooperative needs a huge area and it emits greenhouse gases which are creating air pollution. All in all, industrial development has been very significant for our lives for a variety of reasons and as it is clear from the above paragraphs, it includes both positive and negative issues. In my opinion, a new
factory
next
 to my
community
 appears to be a positive improvement and
I
of me or myself
my
 support
this
 development because of the ideas I have explained.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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