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In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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Human beings have a long story of evolution, but some people still want to find ways of fast enrichment using illegal methods.
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 of all it concerns young population. In fact, it may be caused by the desire for easy profit or thrill. For people who started their lives with crimes, it would be very difficult to get a proper job or to live in society, so it is a problem that needs to be solved. In my opinion, the roots of the problem are flawed mindset, irresponsibility and a lack of work for immature employers. Flawed mindset is acquired due to unfavourable milieu. For a person who lives in the criminal part of town it would be
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