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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion.

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Environment
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 protection has become a hot topic of discussion all over the world. Owing to which some people hold the view that it’s the government that has the responsibility of safeguarding and preserving the
environment
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.
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, some others think that
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 responsibility should be shared by each one of us. So, in
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 essay both the views will be discussed. The foremost thing is that in the process of
environment
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preservance
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, some strict and needful rules must be implemented. And there is no doubt in the fact that the Governments hold very special power of making and amending
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 rules.
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 in most of the countries there are rules and laws regarding: saving the trees; against deforestation; laws related to establishing pollution causing factories away from habitat; about pollution check of running vehicles and many more, but still a big time failure is observed at the step of implementation. So, simply making
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 laws would not help, governments need to take steps to check the implementation and subsequent results of
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 measures. On the other side of the issue, our authorities will always need the support and involvement of every person in obeying and following the protection measures, so as to have better results. There are a number of possible ways in which one can safeguard the surroundings at personal level.
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, at
individual level
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the individual level
, one should plant
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at least
 a tree in lifetime and help it to grow;
carpooling
a connection (like a clamp or vise) between two things so they move together
coupling
cabling
 can be practiced to control fuel consumption and the air pollution, water conservation can
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 be done at
individual level
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the individual level
an individual level
. All these practices do not need the involvement of Government and can be easily followed in day to day life. So, in my opinion, for
protection
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the protection
 of the
environment
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 a combined effort of government and public is required, as the target to be achieved is very high. Government should amend regulations with time to keep a check on the issues whereas we as individuals should not forget our part, as a single step can do wonders in resolving the problems related to
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environment
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the environment
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