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The graph shows the actual and predicted change in employment in the UK, by education level

The graph shows the actual and predicted change in employment in the UK, by education level
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The graph shows the actual and predicted percentage change in
employment
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 in the UK, by
education
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 level since 1990 and predicts a trend until 2025.
A growth
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Growth
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 in
employment
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 was noted in two educational levels - those with a master’s
degree
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 and a bachelor's
degree
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. First, the
employment
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 rate of those with a bachelor's
degree
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 escalated to 14% in 2000 when it started fluctuating between 8% and 14%.
This
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 is expected to continue in the coming years.
At
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 the beginning, the rate of
employment
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 of those with a master's
degree
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 was slower but steadier than the growth rate of
bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree
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employment
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.
However
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, the situation changed in 2005 when
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employment
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the employment
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 of those with a higher
education
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 level rapidly escalated and the upward trend has been maintained since
then
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 and is expected to continue.
On the other hand
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, job recruitment of people who graduated from high school and those without a school certificate has been steadily dropping since 1990.
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, the decrease in
employment
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 of high school graduates levelled off in 2020 and is expected to remain stable.
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, the trends show that people with higher
education
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 are much more likely to be employed than those with lower
education
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 or none at all, and the trend is not likely to change in the future.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, education, degree with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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