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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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A remarkable change has happened in the
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 two decades in the women ‘s life. A situation that has led to think that several troubles of a teenager is a consequence from the fact that mothers have quite worked,
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 they do not have time to stay at home to care for their children.
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, I disagree with
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 statement, due to young people should be a responsibility of both parents. While in the majority of families, children are closer
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 has happened to the fact that women have shared more time with them, even from their birth.
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, it is commonly believed that the care of a child is a responsibility of a woman, because, they will obey them more. Indeed, if the female side is not in a house
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 could bring as a consequence that sons have a bad behaviour, to get the attention from their mothers.
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, there are many factors to explain the juvenile delinquency.
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 one of them is the lack the attention from both parents, the most important is the capitalistic world in which we live nowadays.
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, people need more material goods to survive, so if they do not have the support economics and emotional from their families, likely they have to commit some crimes. In conclusion, if we think that the breading is only responsibility of women, we would be back as a society, because if we force to mothers to stay at home
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 does not mean that juvenile delinquencies decrease. Even the labour world would have a low quality, because the female side is fundamental in the workplace.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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