Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Healthy mind and healthy body is the need of today's world. While, some people contend that
its
it is
it's
an
individual's
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individual
accountability to look after their own fitness and intake of healthy food. Others, argue that the legislation should intervene to ascertain that their nationals follow a nutritious diet and follow a healthy regime. I firmly opine, that an amalgamation of these two thoughts can lead to a healthier
society
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all together.
This
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essay will examine both the views and will draw an inference. It is a sole responsibility of a person to take care of his own health. If an individual is not able to follow a healthy routine and a healthy diet, it will have a direct impact on his health.
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, people who follow sedentary lifestyle and poor-diet, are more prone to get
heatlh
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
issues
such
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as obesity,
diabeties
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
,
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,
high/low blood pressure and so on.
As a result
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, that person
can not
can not
cannot
contribute positively to his
society
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both personally and professionally.
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, as a responsible national it becomes our obligation to make our
society
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cordial by following a healthy everyday living.
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, in
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fast paced busy life, people still inevitably follow a sluggish lifestyle just for their convenience, which is having a dire consequence on our
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.
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, if the law-making body mediates to spread awareness among its' nationals, it will certainly boost the sentiments of its people to follow a
vigrous
characterized by forceful and energetic action or activity
vigorous
mode of life. To illustrate, US state union runs several camps to sensitize its people to go
to for regular walka
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for regular walks
to for regular walks
, climb stairs
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of
take
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taking
lifts and elevators, which in turn has made people follow what their state union says.
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, improving the lifestyles of people gradually. To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated arguments and information, and
delibrating
carefully thought out in advance
deliberating
all the
facts it
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facts, it
can be deducted that
officials
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official
interference can definitely make people follow a healthy routine.
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, it
can not
can not
cannot
force its' people for anything,
hence
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, it remains
person's own responsibility
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the person's own responsibility
to take care of his own health. I feel that in order to have a sound
society
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, individuals should take care of their own fitness, and the government should take necessary steps to raise people's awareness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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