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Full time university students spend most of their time studying. They should be doing other activities too. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 fast changing world nowadays, everything is unpredictable, so I disagree
university
 students spend most of the time studying. In the past, the number of
university
 was not as many as in
21st century
Suggestion
the 21st century
. Become a
university
student
 is very precious and represents a bright future after graduated. Job hunting will become
less competition
Suggestion
less competitive
 because of their beautiful academic level, students will receive more potential job offers that companies are willing to give opportunity to whom with outstanding performance.
However
, if students only focus on studying throughout the school year, excepted knowledge learnt from school, they might
wanted
Suggestion
want
 to utilize it in the real situation. Socialization is important for
student
Suggestion
students
the student
 as part of their learning, seeing friends or group gathering events will improve their social skill which can strength the speaking ability and how the way to deal with different people.
Furthermore
, the more various activities the
student
 participated
such
 as some volunteer work or go theatre, somehow they will receive certain messages and experience that cannot be got it from
university
Suggestion
the university
. So, it’s true for
university
 students to perceive knowledges from different channels. Needless to say, social life mentioned above is playing an important part
for
Suggestion
of
student
, but time management for studying and how to spend their leisure time should well planned and organized,
otherwise
 the result of becoming succeed will failure.

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