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Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie?

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Many divergent views exist on how best to produce a better
film
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 in today's modern era. Some feel that lots of
money
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 should not be spent on a single
movie
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.
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, a great number of people, including myself, are of the opinion that it is essential to invest an enormous
amount
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 of
money
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 in
the
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film
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 production. In
thisessay
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this essay
, I will provide the rationale for my viewpoint on
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 matter before exploring other factors that could allow
such
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movie
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a movie
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 to be successful in
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film
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 industry. The primary reason to spend a huge
amount
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 of
money
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 is that it can make the
film
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 very realistic. It goes without saying that when a
movie
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 is made with
an
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an advance technological platform
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advance
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 technological platforms
such
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 as Blueray, 3-D, etc.
then
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 it attracts more audiences.
This
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 means that more and more realistic
scence
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scenes
 a
movie
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incorportates
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incorporates
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, it requires a potentially large investment in the beginning to adopt those technical functions. I am hardly alone in
this
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 view, and some empirical evidence can be provided to support it. A 2019 study, as in illustration, conducted by a team of researchers at the University of Toronto found that 80% of successful movies had to spend an enormous
amount
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 of
money
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 to make films much more sensible. Not only does spending
money
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 make a successful
film
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, but other aspects of the
film
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such
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 as
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the
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storyline and action
scences
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scenes
sciences
makes
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make
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 it top-notch. It stands to the reason that no matter how much
money
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 a
film
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 director spends on a
perticular
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particular
movies
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movie
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 will not make it successful if the
movie
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 does not have a proper
story line
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storyline
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 to attract the
audiences
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audience
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. The
Movie
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, Titanic, is a shining example of
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.
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movie
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initially
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 did not acquire that much
amount
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 of funding
compare
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 to recent films.
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, the
real- life
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 story experiences and action drama made the
film
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 to be one of the most
successfull
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successful
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film
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films
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 in the
hollywood
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Hollywood
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 industry.
To sum up
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, I maintain that it is vital to spend lots of
money
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 to
produe
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produce
 a good
film
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 which consists
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real experience.
However
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, other aspects of films
such
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 as story and action should not be overlooked. These are
much
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very
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 important to attract
the
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people.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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