Your friend has booked a holiday for both of you. However, you are not happy with the hotel arrangements and want to change them. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter, mention: How excited you are for this holiday with him/her Why are you not happy with the hotel? Which alternatives would you prefer?

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Dear Sunitha, I'm so excitedly awaiting our holidays. I remember the

last

meeting when you told me about your plans for a trip with me. I am really

suprised

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surprised

with

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your

corordination

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coordination

co-ordination

and planning ability. When I received your call,

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overwhelmed with joy.

Moreover

, being

an adventure enthusiasts

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an adventure enthusiast

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, it was my

evertime

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everytime

overtime

dream to visit Kullu and Manali. I'm very thankful to you for choosing

such

a wonderful paradise on Earth. I got the

itenery

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itinerary

send by you through the mail. I am so happy that we are staying there for 6 nights and 1 day. But, sorry to say, I'm not happy with the

hotel

you have booked for us. I wanted to have a room with

balcony

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having

mountain

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view plus dining.

Also

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prefer the

hotel

should be in equal/almost near distance from our destinations places. So that, without wasting time we can explore the whole

Himachal

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of Himachal

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Pradesh.

Furthermore

, when

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checked with one of my

friend

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, the

hotel

which you booked have some negative reviews and which is far from our destination spots. I have googled for more information and

findout

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find out

hotel

named Sun Park

Hotel

, Manali. More than a

hotel

, it is a resort.So we can have some fun time together by playing games and swimming indoor pools. They have their own spa facilities, which will help us to relax from our tiring day roams.

In addition

, the most beautiful part is

this

is a resort area with views of the Himalayas. Please consider my

suggetion

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suggestion

and change the plans

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acoordingly

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accordingly

according

However

, it should be remembered that you will have to obtain a special permit for visiting Rohtang Pass- our

3rd day

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destination. Looking forward

for

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your reply and convey my regards to your parents. Yours lovingly, Sadika

Thu Apr 02 2020

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

296 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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