The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sector in new Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
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These two pie charts depict the new Zealand online shopping sale for four different sections in two years 2003 and 2013. It is clear from the graph that
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proportion was the highest per cent in 2003, but it did not remain that way 10 years later,
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which
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it
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by film and music with
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larger percentage.
According to
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what is shown, many people in 2003 tend to buy clothes and travel a lot as we can see 24% and 36% for each sector respectively.
While
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in 2013 these two section drop
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16% for
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clothes and about 30% for
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travel.
On the other hand
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, books, film and music were the least consumed by people in 2003 they account for 19% and 21% respectively.
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, 10 years after that the purchase amount increased by 3 % for books sealing and 12 %
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movies and music, which became the massive amount of seals in that period by 22% and 33% in each category.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • online shopping
  • retail sector
  • New Zealand
  • comparison
  • increase
  • shift
  • traditional
  • popularity
  • platforms
  • technology
  • internet access
  • consumer behavior
  • preferences
  • factors
  • growth
  • impact
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • challenges
  • opportunities
  • future trends
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