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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended several sightseeing places in Brighton.It can be seen that the percentage of
people
 who are interested in festivals was higher compared with other.
By contrast
, the proportion of tourists who visited
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 was the lowest at the beginning of
a
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 period. In 1980,the proportion of
people
 who are making a visit to art galleries was around 20%
in
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at
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 the initiation of the period, but
at
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 the
end
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 the attitude of
people
 to art
has
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changed and dropped
less
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 than 10%.The figure for festivals decreased gradually till 2000
,
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but
then
 remained steady
stable
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 during a decade. From 1980 to 1995,the percentage of tourists who built pavilions in Brighton reached a peak and made up almost 50%.
However
, that of
people
 decreased approximately by 20%.
While
,
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 there was a significant rise in the figure for
people
 who took part in the piers between 1980 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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