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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
It is true that genetic engineering is a key area of modern scientific research, with various outcomes for all human societies. While I accept that
this
 field of technology may have its dangers, I believe that the benefits of genetic engineering
outweighs
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outweigh
 the drawbacks. The negative outcomes of genetic engineering are often discussed in terms of two key areas, which are food production and the cloning of humans. Genetically modified crops are already being grown, and people are concerned that they may damage
whole ecosystem
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the whole ecosystem
 as foods become resistant to diseases and natural predators. But perhaps even more worrying is the possibility that humans could be modified or cloned. Some people imagine a world in which cloned humans are used to
fights
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fight
 in wars or to provide body part replacements.
Although
 perhaps not a threat to life on earth, the outcomes of
such
 practices would be unprecedented. A more optimistic prediction, and one I favour, is that humans will find ways to mitigate (
azaltmak
) the risks and use genetic technologies in a responsible way. From the food production perspective,
for instance
, crops can be grown more reliably (güvenilir) in harsh conditions. From a medical perspective,
scientist
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scientists
a scientist
the scientist
 may use genetic engineering to produce vaccines, to cure diseases, or to correct a genetic defect before a child is born. If properly regulated, even cloning can be done in a way that improves lives.
For example
, the cloning of individual organs,
such
 as a heart or kidney, could be permitted for transplant purposes. In conclusion, I am convinced that genetic engineering will have a positive impact on our lives, and that people’s fear will be meaningless.

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