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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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In todays era, things have changed a lot and everyone way of working or dealing with their issue has been modified. In some colleges, there are still same old practices are being followed and the student is forced to abide by it.
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 instance, They invest more in cash in building libraries and less sum in other activity like sport. In my opinion, they should be putting equal inputs in both the departments. I shall be discussing more on topic in below paragraphs.
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 with, I would like to mention the importance of physical activity in students routine.
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 with the growing mental pressure, One has to be fit to cope up with stressed life. And playing physical games is the best way. With the rapid consumption of junk food, 60 % of todays population are obese. It does not help individual just to be healthy physically, but mentally and mankind can survive for more time in a healthy way.
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, Reading books is useful, rather, is very important as it educates a person. In many ways, a library is a place where one can go and study and gain knowledge as much as one wants to.
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, only ready won't be good enough in today's world. To conclude, I believe todays generation need to be mentally and physically strong to cope up with the situation outside. So studying places should think and invest equally to both the ends.

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