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Crime rate , is most countries,is ofren higher in urban cities than in rural areas.why do you think that is ?what can be done to reduce the crime.

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Crime rate
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The crime rate
 has shown a northward movement all over the world
.
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.
However
, in
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of nations
,
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,
rate of offences
are
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is
 more in cities than
country side
rural regions
countryside
 areas
.
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.
This
 essay will discuss reasons behind it and shed light
on possible solution to
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on a possible solution to
 curb
this
meance
something that is a source of danger
menace
.
Umemployment
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Unemployment
 is the significant reason behind the growing rate of crimes. In these days, cities have become overpopulated and the biggest reasons is that people who live in countryside areas are migrating to the
metropoliton
relating to or characteristic of a metropolis
metropolitan
 cities in the expectation of big
renumeration
something that remunerates
remuneration
 for their working.
Conversly
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Conversely
,
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,
cities are unable to provide job
oppurtunities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 to
this
 large
number
 of people.
Therefore
,
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,
most of
people
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the people
 opt the way of crime to earn their livelihood.Another reason is, people of cities are more drug addicted
.
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.
Drugpeddlers
 choose the place of supply for their
durgs
a member of the genus Canis (probably descended from the common wolf) that has been domesticated by man since prehistoric times; occurs in many breeds
dogs
drugs
,
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,
where
,
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,
they can target the large
number
 of
peolpe
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
.
when
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When
 the people have
eassy
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easy
 success to drugs
then
 they become easily drug addicted
.
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.
So, for
satisfication
the act of certifying or bestowing a franchise on
certification
 of drug needs
,
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,
they commit offences
such
 as
buglary
entering a building unlawfully with intent to commit a felony or to steal valuable property
burglary
,
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,
murder and other many more. As a every problem
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,
it
also have
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also has
 some feasible solution to take
this
 concern.Primarily
,
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,
government should chalk out a better employment policy.
For instance
,
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,
establishing of new
businessss
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
 because it will create
large
Suggestion
a large number
number
 of jobs.
Secondly
, judicial governments should give stringent sentence to criminals which set a
deterent
something immaterial that interferes with or delays action or progress
deterrent
 for others.
Last
 but not the least
,
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,
a
campagian
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
champagne
 should be
cunduct
direct the course of; manage or control
conducted
 to make aware society about the ill effects of drugs. In conclusion
,
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,
although
 lack of job
oppurtunitis
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 and drugs are the reason of criminal
activitities
any specific behavior
activities
,
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,
 these can be overcome by
creation
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the creation
 of large
number
 jobs, strict punishments and awareness among people.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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