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In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Family life in the modern world is not the same experience as in the past, because families are smaller. In the past, there were advantages and disadvantages to being members of a big family. I believe there were three main benefits.
Firstly
,
children
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the children
 always had other children to play with in the same house, so they learned social skills. They
also
 they
quarreled but
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quarreled, but
 when they quarreled, they learned to defend themselves.
Secondly
, children helped in the house and as a consequence they became more responsible.
Also
, different generations lived together, so grandparents looked after young children and younger brothers learned many things from their elder ones. I think many of the disadvantages were financial.
Firstly
, one of the parents could not work, because he or she had to stay at home to look after the children and the grandparents.
This
 meant the family earned less.
As a result
, parents had less money to pay for their children's education and other activities.
However
, in my view, the biggest problem was that parents could not pay so much attention to individual children.
As a result
, children sometimes suffered. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of large families were greater than the disadvantages. The family had less money, but family members formed a stronger relationship and they supported and helped each other when they had problems.
Also
, people were always surrounded by their relatives, so they were never lonely.
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