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People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

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In recent years, the frequency of sugary drink utilizing has significantly increased. Two of the main ca
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ugary drinks from supermarket, store and vending machine. It is highly recommended that appropriate measures should be implemented to reduce the risks resulted from
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 burning issue. The government should limit advertisements promoting sugary drinks that are directly ta
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Another measure is the rising taxes on sweet beverages. It leads to the growing of pr
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overnment that can be taken to discourage people from drinking sugary beverages.

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