The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above
depict
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average
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the average
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and the future prediction of birth and death in a specific region
during
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a hundred years. It’s clear from the chart that the
numbers
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number
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of people who are living
is
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gradually increased during the period between 1901 and 1961 as the range of born people reached a peak. To illustrate , the average
1
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and it will start to
steady
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drop again .of born have been gradually increasing
as
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since
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it had a peak in 1961 ,
then
the number starts to fall again ,the same
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in the number of dead people which is used to increase in the past till it will reach a significant point in 2061.
Overall
the number of born and death increase and will be higher in the future.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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