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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give you opinions.

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Over the past decades, technology
has advancing
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is advancing
has been advancing
has advanced
was advancing
has been advanced
 in an extremely rapid and unpredictable way. There are a lot of new online applications which can create a more convenient life among people
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 as social networking. Seemingly, getting to know new friends via online or face-to-face has sparked a hot debate recently. I personally think that they are both feasible and there have no conflicts between them. Reasons will be showcased in the following. To start off, making new acquaintance through online social platforms can definitely break the geographical barrier and makes interaction between people easier. Without the limitation of time zones and locations, online users living from different parts of the
world
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 can interact and communicate freely.
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, it can enhance globalization as people can share different information about their hometown’s culture and background via the internet, make the
world
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 as a whole.
On the other hand
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, internet chatting networks are definitely easy to use and manage. What users need is just a hardware
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 as a mobile phone or a laptop, and there are a great variety of networking applications which can be downloaded
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from
 free. The instructions provided by most of the applications are always simple to be
understand
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understood
 and follow.
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, people living in the global village can start a new friendship whenever, wherever and whoever they want in a
liable
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liability
 way. Meanwhile, except knowing new companions via the online, a
face-to-face one
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face-to-face, one
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 encouraged in the modern
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. By
different kind
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different kinds
a different kind
 of body language, facial expression and tone of voices, people can have a solid grasp of a person’s character and personality.
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, the quality of a conversation can be raised.
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, it is concerned that people who live in a cosmopolitan will have difficulty in meeting new friends in the real
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 since they often have a busy lifestyle which making them hard to spare time on it. To sum off, I deem that both views have their advantages and there
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are
 no contradictions between them. I believe they are indispensable to people living around the
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 and I can foresee there will be more new technology coming to facilitate communication between people.
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