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In many cities, many people are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

#cities #people #apartment #blocks #accommodation
The government across the world are facing various challenges towards the city infrastructure planning, with the growing inequalities and major migration to the cities from rural areas the demand of living spaces is always exceeding the
supply
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supply, hence
hence
, the residential complexes are the answer to solve the issues of urban space to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 the population. In our essay we will discuss the pros and cons of apartment living spaces. The residential complex
are
Suggestion
is
afforable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
 it can help to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of people in the area covering from multiple stories over the piece of land.
Additionly with
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Additionally, with
Additionally with
 nearby areas of
such
 structure can help better town planning as major population is
center
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centred
centre
 it can help in the development of necessary infrastructure and public utilities. A residential apartment building cannot be
redevelop
Suggestion
redeveloped
 frequently it may make
structure
Suggestion
the structure
detoriate
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorate
 with time and it may require frequent repairs and maintenance.
Apartment building
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The apartment building
An apartment building
are
Suggestion
is
 inherently less private and may impact the privacy of the residents. The benefits of the apartment
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
 outweigh the
disavantanges
however
, before a decision a through research
of
Suggestion
on
 personal needs should be taken care of before any major future plan is made.
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