The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

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a major problem
the major problem
und not only olde
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advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
others
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children. In western society the percentage of overweight children increasingly developed by 20% in the
last
decade. The main reason why I believe is incorrect nutrition and hereditary factor.
This
essay will examine my personal views according to causes and effects and present a final conclusion. One problem is that overeating swee
ts or
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sweet
harmful foods.
For example
, in our modern life majority of children really keen on from fast foods and candies like hamburgers, hot dogs, pizzas, chocolates and cakes which are include lots of chemicals which harmful for
the
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to
ir body and organism.
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kind of products delicious and yummy,
that is
why, useful products like fruits and vegetables are not as popular as jank
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the remains of something that has been destroyed or broken up
junk
ds. Another drawback is that hereditary factor which depends on genetics. If chil
dren's parents and
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the children's parents
grandparents with excess weight,
then
most likely the children will
also
be fat . U
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ortunately, incorrect nutrition and obesity leads to not the best effects with health and appearance.
Firstly
, children's overweight effect to
th
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of
eir phys
ics and
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physical
mental health.
For instance
, they are suff
er fro
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suffering
m digestion system, doing hard exercises, foot and spine diseases. Wher
ethrough, mo
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Overthrow
st of the body is covered in fats, all organs facing with various diseases.
Secondly
, obesity
also
effect to peop
le appearance. Ch
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a person's appearance
person's appearance
peoples' appearance
person appearance
peoples appearance
ildren with
such
physiques, problem to find the right clothes with right size or excess fat even on the face,
accordingly
they can feel themselves timidly and shyly. To sum up all views above, can come to the conclusion that, incorrect nutrition leads to overweight and it in turn leads to worse effects like problems with health and body

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • obesity
  • caloric intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical education
  • nutritious
  • psychological well-being
  • self-esteem
  • socioeconomic
  • healthcare system
  • life expectancy
  • obesity-related complications
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