In companies promotions to high positions should be given to employees inside the company not to someone from outside an new hiring. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that an experienced employee within the organisation should be given advancements in their rank rather than hiring new people from outside.
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integral part of company productivity and doing so will make them feel rewarded and motivated. The already existing staff adapted
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the
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new changes quickly since they
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the
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organisation
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policies very well.
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to show the management their talent and their handling capacity
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critical situations. They will be able to
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more contributions to the company.
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the experience and skill sets they acquired throughout the years will help them to solve the new challenges quickly for the newly appointed task
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the goals of the company
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easily achieved. Being
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the
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higher position
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them a larger salary to encourage the work-spirit and perhaps even make them more loyal to the firm. Being rewarded and appreciated will make them more motivated towards the job and they will come up with new ideas and automations which will help corporations in reducing manual efforts and time required for repetitive
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.
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, if staff is inspired they will proactively come up with
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new ideas to improve the quality which will result in more benefits for production and help in gaining
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of the clients which
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in building good client
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in-house staff should be given opportunities to move up in their position will help them to boost their confidence and corporations will
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with
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their new positive attitude by gaining more clients in a way achieving the annual targets.
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