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The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavant.

The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavant.
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These two bar charts show us what
does
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UK undergraduate and postgraduate students do after completing their degree apart from doing a full-time job, In 2008. It is highly noticeable that students who completed the post-graduate degree are willing to find a
full time
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 job more than
doing
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 other things. Which is a good thing. In the bar chart which
illustrate
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 undergraduate students, numbers are from 5000-30000 but in a
post graduate
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post-graduate
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 student chart it is from 500-3000. It is a great example of what I said before. Lots
if
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 undergraduates are focusing
in
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future
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a future
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study
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studies
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, But the less interest they have in doing
voluntary
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the voluntary
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working
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.The survey is almost
same
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the same
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 in
two
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the two
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 charts. But post-graduates have more interest in doing part-time work as same as
further
 study. We cannot see that from the upper chart because it is much lower
comparing
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compared
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 to future
study
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studies
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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