it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment shoukd parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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the world so careless and

beatiful

delighting the senses or exciting intellectual or emotional admiration

beautiful

period

this

is childhood with

childness

a young person of either sex

children

Unfortunatelly

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Unfortunately

, some children do not

this

spell, because their parents, foster parents or teacher "die" them dreams. I fully disagree with learning the difference between right and wrong at an early age by

punish

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punishing

. So in

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essay,

refers to the speaker or writer

intend to explore explore for kids

this

distinction without castigation. There are many

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misfortunes

teach

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to teach

teaching

to children by punish. I can support my opinion with following examples.

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of all, many swindler, killer or savages childhood connect with punishment, which means when they were an early age did any mistake by wrong, their parents did unjust

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a formal charge of wrongdoing brought against a person; the act of imputing blame or guilt

accusation

accusations

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For example

, swear, turn out of

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the house

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introduces something in contrast or unexpected

but

then

they feel themselves

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guilty

guiltily

jointly

and fall into decay, evidently took happen many problems.

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same elders inflict penalty to kids,

then

reconcile themselves when they

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are doing

they feels.

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cowardly by any mistakes, so,

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"cowardly" poison children mind in the future.

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the

second

place, some kids life so important to bring up

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any sort of punishment.

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as, deprived children's toys or one's

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

kind of cartoon, light penalty. It is clear that call

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directs

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their

parents or

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teachers'

attention by any

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a young person of either sex

children

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person doing many

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defects

during

early age

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the early age

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older persons

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believe that punishment

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cause damage our bright generation and their

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moral and ethical development
deterrent
undesirable behavior
psychological harm
corrective measure
positive reinforcement
age-appropriate consequences
instilling discipline
constructive punishment
punitive
consistent message
disciplinary process
sense of responsibility
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