Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

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Inspite

Suggestion

In spite

of the fact that attending university after graduating from high school can give students a lot of

benefis

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

benefit

, there are

also

arguments relating to drawbacks of it.

This

essay will be explored both of the two perspectives with my views. On the one hand, some people believe that it is natural that students are supposed to go to a university after finishing secondary school.

That is

because they think that it is a necessary course in order that grown up students can get a decent occupation.

That is

, university students could not only learn a variety of knowledge but

also

get different experiences that most companies and public

industiries

the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise

industries

require fro employment at school

For example

, I studied a lot of

major subjects

Suggestion

the major subjects

Suggestion

teachers' education

such

process

Suggestion

the process

of teaching and teaching

methos

a way of doing something, especially a systematic way; implies an orderly logical arrangement (usually in steps)

methods

method

as well as

pracice

a customary way of operation or behavior

practice

of teaching.

Accordingly

, I could be

empoyed

having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary

employed

imediately

without delay or hesitation; with no time intervening

immediately

as soon as I graduated.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

152 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some say that people should continue to work in the same job for a lifetime, while others say they should change the job at least once in their career. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Plant and animal diversity is declining around the world. Why is this happening? Why is this a problem?

Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after shcool. Discuss both views

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.