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The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
visitors
 who visited four different types of popular
attraction
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attractions
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 places like theme parks, Museums, Galleries, Historic Houses and Monuments, and Wildlife
park
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parks
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 and Zoos in Britain in 1999.
Overall
,
visitors
 were mostly attracted to the Theme parks
likewise
, museums
where
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were
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 their
second
-best destination to visit. Meanwhile, historic houses and monuments, and wildlife were visited by
few
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a few
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.
To begin
 with, the theme park was the most
attracted
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 designation where people experienced five different things, including the Blackpool pleasure beach
where
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which
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 47% of people were spotted visiting,
however
, adventures and Legoland, Windsor, have the same number of
visitors
 (10% each) which was lower than the Pleasure land, Southport Chessington World of Adventures and Alton towers which were 16% and 17% respectively.
Secondly
, more than one-
third
 (37%) percentage of people visited
the
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apply
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Museums and Galleries
whereas
 Wildlife
park
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parks
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 and Zoos had fewer
visitors
to
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than
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 9%. Historic Houses and monuments were popular places to explore,
although
, few visited them
to
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apply
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16%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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