The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The charts illustrate the outcome of
the
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customer's
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satisfaction in the Parkway hotel after
handed
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out some questionnaires in the years 2005 and 2010. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, the customers seem to have experienced more
customer
service
in the year 2010
where
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most
people
have
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voted for excellent and good,
whereas
the
number of
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dissatisfaction
on
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with
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service
was
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also
decreased. Given that, in 2010 most customers rated the hotel's client work
for
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giving good
service
providers
whereas
it was different in 2005
However
, it experienced a huge growth (39%-14% respectively).
Likewise
, the hotel started to give more client
service
than they had given in the past wherein 2005 only 5% of
people
voted
on
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for
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excellent, but 28% of
people
voted in 2010 which
is
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an increased
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increased
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by
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23%. In 2005 45% of
people
were satisfied with the
service
given,
although
, in 2010, it shows
some
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drastic downfall
by
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28%.On the one hand, the
percent
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of
people
voted
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who voted
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for
excellent
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excellence
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was
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increased immensely.
On the other hand
, fewer
people
voted for very poor (4%)
customer
service
provided.
Likewise
, the percentage of poor
customer
satisfaction
people
also
decreased by 9% (21% in 2005-12%in 2010).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, likewise, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words customer, service, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • customer service
  • questionnaire
  • survey
  • respondents
  • rating scale
  • hospitality
  • customer satisfaction
  • comparison
  • data
  • trends
  • improvement
  • deterioration
  • feedback
  • service areas
  • hospitality industry
  • guest experience
  • satisfaction level
  • to rate
  • significant
  • frequency
  • percentage
  • chart
  • bar graph
  • pie chart
  • analysis
  • conclusion
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