The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
proportion
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of visitors to four famous destinations in Brighton, English within 30 years from 1980 to 2010. We can see that 30% of tourists who came to Brighton for the festival in 1980 had slightly dropped to around 27% in 2010.
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, Art Gallery
also
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witnessed a similar decline in terms of the visitors'
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, but much sharper, from a peak of about 37% in 1985 after a
heightened
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of 22%, it
then
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tailed off to just less than 10% in 2010. It was,
therefore
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, the least popular attraction among
four
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the four
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at the end
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of the period.
By contrast
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, the trend was largely
reverse
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for Pavilion and Pier.
Although
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only accounted for 10% of the total visited tourists in 1980, Pier's
proportion
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more than doubled
at the end
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of the period with some fluctuations during the years. The
proportion
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of tourists to
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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also
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increased with a marked rise and fall, from 23% in 1980 it skyrocketed to approximately 48% in 1995, followed by a shrink to just right above 30% in 2010 which is slightly higher than the Festival. In summary,
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the percentage of visiting the Art Gallery and Festival reduced,
an
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the
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apposite trend was seen in the other two places.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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