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Some people say full time students should spend most of time studying; others believe that they should do other activities as well.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #time #students #activities
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It must be admitted that academics
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, many people think that those who study as full
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 students should devote all their hours for the same
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 while a few others encourage students to do other co - curricular or indulge in other various past
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 activities. I
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 latter opinion
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 My preference is justified
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 non academic activities can rejuvenate and distress the learners. When the full
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 students participate in activities pertaining sports, music
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 dance
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 painting
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 they certainly develop their abilities and talents in these areas and
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 can ignite their interests in
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 passions.
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 not only surfaces their
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potential, but
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 attributes confidence in the
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the prevailing current of thought
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 studies.
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, through participating in various
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cultures
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 students
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 undoubtedly
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 develop a renewed perception to an allotted task.
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 by playing sports, apart from their studies, makes student friendlier, learn strategies to achieve a task or a deadline and being alert in taking quick decisions
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The extracurricular activities
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develop
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 as being an extrovert
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 the art of approaching people, teamwork and judging one's potential.
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 it
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 cannot be ignored that if these activities become frequent or dominant, it can not only develop a reckless attitude to
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study
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, may bifurcate them from their
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the prevailing current of thought
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 academics.
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 should be closely monitored. All in all
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 it can be summed up that
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 the other activities pose a small risk to the full
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 students, my arguments thoroughly justify that
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 " all works and no play makes Jack a full boy " but with
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 " all works and some extra activities makes Jack a smart and happy student.
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