televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today, are these shows a good method of finding talented people or are they just entertainment?

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, we all know that televised talent hot talk of tv in most countries.

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I believe it is a chance and the opportunity for Competitors to enter

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I can understand very well how much these shows are effective, even, if they don't succeed in competitions. --By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that televised talent shows is the best way for recognition talented people and I hope that governments have actions to address

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problems some people who can't participate, until they can be famous and on the other hands they attract a lot of people to watch them.

Mon Apr 06 2020

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televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today, are these shows a good method of finding talented people or are they just entertainment?

Fully explain your ideas

There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree? What are some other reasons why people may stay?

Write about the following topic. Buying things online on the internet such as boo, air tickets and groceries is s becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages.

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These days the majority of employers require good social skills. While these social skills could improve employee management and bring effective networking, these could social skills could not determine exact qualification and abilities.