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Monthly sales of Drinks at small café Sales of Drinks January February March April Ice Drinks 150 150 190 230 Tea and Coffee 250 270 220 180 Juices 200 190 210 200 Cocktails 90 90 110 100

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The provided table represents information on monthly sales of different drinks at a small café starting from January till April. Overall, it is clear from the table that several sales were the greatest one in terms of
ice
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 drinks in April contrasting the rest of the drinks,
on the other hand
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,
coffee
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 and tea are drunk by most people in comparison with other sorts of drinks. The sale starts
on
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in
 January with
revenue
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 150 dollars for the
ice
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 drinks and 250$ for tea and
coffee
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 which is more than about 40% of
revenue
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 realised during the month. In January the cocktails
revenue
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 seems to be showing a declining trend with $ 90. While in February the figure for
revenue
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 of
ice
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 drinks and cocktails remained the same with 150$ and 90$ respectively. We can observe a slight increase in tea and
coffee
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 sales by 20$.
On the other hand
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revenue
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 during March did not experience a significant change.
Juice
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The juice
 was
favored
preferred above all others and treated with partiality
favoured
 by the majority of people with the highest rate, 210$. Showing an increase on March
ice
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 drinks rose to 190$. Looking at April, the figure for the
revenue
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 of
ice
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 drinks hit the highest point with 230$, whereas the sale of cocktail drinks were approximately halved (100$) comparing with
ice
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 drinks. Tea and
coffee
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was
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were
 drunk a bit fewer with the
revenue
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 180$ rather than other months.
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