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Monthly sales of Drinks at small café Sales of Drinks January February March April Ice Drinks 150 150 190 230 Tea and Coffee 250 270 220 180 Juices 200 190 210 200 Cocktails 90 90 110 100

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The table shows the monthly sales of drinks in a small cafe from January to April. The table shows that the sales rate for all beverages was
highest
Suggestion
higher
 in April compared to other months, and people preferred to drink tea and
coffee
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 during
this
Linking Words
 period
instead
Linking Words
 of the remaining beverages. . In January, sales start at $ 150 for iced drinks and $ 250 for tea and
coffee
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, which is about 40% of the revenue generated during the month. Revenue from cocktails in January shows a downward trend with $ 90. Revenue from iced drinks and cocktails in February was $ 150 and $ 90, respectively. We can see that tea and
coffee
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 sales have increased slightly by $ 20.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, earnings in March did not change significantly. The juice was liked by many at the highest rate - $ 210. The price of iced drinks rose to $ 190 in March. Looking back at April, the highest income from iced drinks was $ 230, while sales of cocktail drinks almost doubled compared to iced drinks ($ 100). Tea and
coffee
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 were slightly intoxicating, earning $ 180 more than in other months.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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