The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
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The charts illustrate the
number
of sports played by the children
(Football
, Athletics
and swimming) in the given period between 2008 and 2014 and the money spent by their parents. Overall
, the money was spent in pounds and the number
of children
was measured in millions.
Initially
, the first figure was about the average money spent on children
's sports then
in 2008 parents spend an average of 20 pounds monthly. In the following 2 years, it slowly began to increase and went on increasing. Same way, it had reached nearly an average of 32 pounds monthly by 2014.
Secondly
, the next
chart showed that the statistic of children
had participated in 3 different sports like
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Football
, athletics
, and swimming. The engagement of children
in athletics
has experienced some fluctuation, meanwhile, swimming and football
participations were almost stable. In 2008, nearly 1 million
children
were involved in athletics
whereas
the number
of swimmers was 2.3 million
. Although
, the number
of swimming candidate
was higher in Fix the agreement mistake
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an
initial phase, in 2011 the Correct article usage
the
number
of athletics
and swimming were equal (2.5 million
). The number
of participation
in Replace the word
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athletics
was on rapid growth, but it started to fall by 2014 by nearly 1.5 million
, at the same time, the number
of participations
in swimming has been increasing at the same speed.
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participation
Finally
, In terms of footballs
it was found that mostly 8 Add a comma
,footballs
million
children
had participated in 2008 and it has been running smoothly until 2009 after it showed a slight downfall of 1 million
. Even though many were interested in the starting, it didn't go as it should be Moreover
, football
was seen almost
stable until 2010, it rose by 2 Change preposition
as almost
million
by 2014.Submitted by anishpanta51 on
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