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Today more and more students are deciding to move to a different country for higher studies. Do you think that the benefits of this outweigh the problem?

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International students are increasing dramatically and the trend of students pursuing educational opportunities in a country other than their own is on a rise. There are numerous convincing reason to prove that it is beneficial along with
handful
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a handful
 of drawback Studying abroad gives students exposure to many different types of people, language
,
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,
customs and food. Student become independent and self reliant. Throwing themselves into completely new environment help them figure out what they are good at
,
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,
as well as what they are not good at. They can gain life experiences and speed up their transition from
teen-ager
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenager
 to adult by leaping into the unknown.
when
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When
student
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a student
the student
 is away from
home he
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home, he
 start missing those familiar
comfort
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comforts
 that he look for granted and he start appreciating everything he has learnt or received from his parents. Students studying abroad are able to use new global
mind set
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindset
 and enrich their resume. On the flip side students feel home sickness.
many
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Many
time
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times
 they suffer from
recism
the prejudice that members of one race are intrinsically superior to members of other races
racism
 and ragging
,
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,
such
 bad experience affect their studies. Student
face
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faces
 problem in communication.
they
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They
 end up staying with people of
Thier
of them or themselves
their
 country and become introvert.
many
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Many
time
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times
 they get confused between culture.
At
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In
 time the students are unable to afford and pay back their education loan. To core out, going abroad for education is a profitable investment. Studying abroad
allow
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allows
 students to experience another part of them in a different
settings
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setting
.
Therefore
, I opine it is advisable to pursue higher education in
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
.

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